there is soo much that comes to my mind,
these mixed feelings and its presence all the time
the restlessness that leaves me numb,
the fear that takes away all my senses,
the thoughts that dont allow me to be in the present
the constant thrive to survive and get somewhere,
the absolute that I feel every moment,
the thirst to solve the mystery of my life
the constant try to provide momentum to life..
to achieve, to accomplish and to witness
the taste of life that is in my mind
Ah!! its all but passion and faith and strength,
to be at peace with myself and rest in content...
I find deep feelings about some evil or negative elements have propel a fight against survival. The poem talks about fear, restlessness which are bothering a person and at the same time there are lot of milestones which are yet to be accomplished... Finally poem talks about passion, faith and strength which to me is lil abrupt...
ReplyDeleteSo, I feel there needs one more param which will convey the feeling of transition from survival needs to achievable things..
Something like..
Now is the fight of my mind to get all odds out..
To prove and witness the sound success of life..
never was the time never was the way..
still a fight for success of life has been my faith...
Imagination can lead doors but my faith and strength are all channelized to be on path of success...
Now I realize ...
Ah!! .....
Do lemme know how you think about it...
Overall a nice poem... Keep up!